Bonjour!!!
Je m’appelle Amna. J’ai douze ans et j’ habite à Leicester. Mon anniversaire, cèst le dix huit septembre. J’ai un frère et une soeur.
Il s’appellent Hamd et ma soeur s’appelle Kamilah. Hamd a deux ans et Kamilah a neuf ans. Normalement, j’adore mon frère parce qu’il est très mignon et sage mais je n’aime pas ma soeur parce qu’elle est stupide et assez pènible.
J’ai deux oiseaux et un hamster. Mon hamster est très petit et très mignon. Je pense que mon hamster est sage mais mon oiseau est assez horrible et quelquefois pénible.
Je voudrais une tortue parce que selon moi ils sont sages et quelquefois assez sympa.
she has a very welcoming beginning
she has given a large range of adjectives
she could have made it shorter
Posted by: angelee k | 01/17/2009 at 01:10 PM
1. you have used interesting words to explain your opinions
2. the font is clear and your writing is understandable.
Posted by: Neelam v | 01/17/2009 at 02:33 PM
1. It isn't too long or too short
2. Described it well and...
Not of highlighted the words
Posted by: Uma A | 01/18/2009 at 12:31 PM
1. Good vocab
2. Intresting
You could have wrote more
Posted by: Hafsa K | 01/18/2009 at 05:42 PM
i liked your writing it was colourful
it was interesting
wish- could have not done the background colour black
Posted by: Haneefah A | 01/19/2009 at 04:45 PM
STAR(*)= Not too long
STAR(*)= good vocab
WISH= NOt of highlited
Posted by: Neel R | 01/19/2009 at 08:41 PM
* very good use of vocabulary
* very interesting
WISH you could use different french words
Posted by: Sneha G | 01/22/2009 at 09:24 PM