Moi - Haneefah RW

Je m’appelle Haneefah. J’ai onze ans. Mon anniversaire, c’est le vingt-six juin. J’habite à Leicester.

 

J’ai un frère et une soeur. Il s’appelle Muhammad. Il a treize ans. J’aime mon frère Muhammad parce qu’ il est sympa mais quelquefois il est stupide. Mes soeurs s’appellent Humairaa et Hafsah. Hafsah a quinze ans et Humairaa a seize ans. Personnellement je n’aime pas ma soeur Hafsah parce qu’ elle est ennuyeuse mais quelquefois elle est sympa. J’aime ma soeur Humairaa parce qu’ elle est intelligente.

 

J’ai un poisson. Il s’appelle Sienna et il est mignon. Je voudrais un chat parce qu’ ils sont petits et mignons

Comments

[bejal p]

i think this was written very well.
firstly i think she has used a lot of good adjectives. she has also used the correct punctuation.
i think she can improve it by using a different word in the last paragraph as she used the word mignon twice.
overall i thought it was great!!

[Bijal T]

1. The writing is very colourful!
2. It's nice the way it is written in paragraphs.
I think it could have been a bit more shorter.

[Harsh S]

YOUR WORK IS GOOD AND NICE.

I CAN READ ALL THE WORDS AND YOU HAVE ANSWERED ALL THE QUESTIONS.

YOU SHOULD USE ONLY ONE COLOUR AND YOU HAVE USED THREE COLOURS.

[vanisha]

i like that your work is colourful
i also like that you have answered all the questions and it all makes sense.
although the colours could have been a bit darker.

[MeganL]

Very Colourful and Bright.
Written Well.

[angelee k]

i like that she has used adjectives
she has answered all the questions
but hannefah should change the colour of the font because it is very bright

[Neelam v]

it is writen very well and she has used the right punctuation.
it is understandable and she has used a lot of adjectives.

you could have made it a little shorter.

[Amna k]

i like it beacuse its colourful and clear
it has quite alot of description
but you could have made it a bit shorter!!

[Hafsa K]

1. Good Vocab
2. Good punctation
should have used one colour