Moi- Angelee RW

Je m'appelle Angelee. J'ai douze ans. Mon anniversaire cest le vingt-neuf ans. J'habite Leicester. J'ai un frère et une soeur. Il  s’appelle Veer et elle s’appelle Naina. Il a six ans et elle a dix-sept ans. J'adore mon frere quelquefois parce qu’il est amusant et sage. J'aime ma soeur normalement mais elle est penible.

J'ai une tortue. Elle s’appelle Neelam.Je voudrais un cheval parce qu’ils sont grands.

Comments

[Bijal T]

1. Their were some good words such as normalement.
2. Most of it made sense.
You could have used more describing words.

[bejal p]

i think it is really good as she used some good adjectives and also used correct punctuation.she can improve it by linking sentences together.

[Amna k]

it's funny the way you called your turtle,
neelam and your font is clear but you missed
a in j'habite a leicester.

[Neelam v]

firstly thanks for naming your tortoise NEELAM!
1. you have used intesresting words to explain your opinions.
2. it makes sence and is understandable.
i think you could have made it a bit more longer.

[Uma A]

1. u described it very well
2.It made sense and...
I think you could have explained why you liked your pet

[Haneefah A]

i liked your adjectives
i liked your writing it was very interesting
wish- could have made it longer