Moi- Ciaran RW

Je m’appelle Ciaran. J’ai douze ans. J’habite Leicester.

J’ai quatre frères et une soeur.Ils s’appellent Ben, Leighton, Jaden, Ashton et Jasmine.Ils ont 10,8,7,5 et 4 ans.Je n’aime pas mes frères et ma soeur la plupart du temps parce qu’ils sont pénibles.

Mon anniversaire est le six décembre.

J’ai un poisson.Quelquefois il est agaçant.

Comments

[Bijal T]

1. His writing is in paragraphs!
2. He's used correct punctuation!
He could have wrote the nubers in words!

[MUNIS U]

i thought it was very good because it was set neatly and if i am sure it had no spelling mistake. but the middle paragraph was a bit too long

[MeganL]

Its a Bit Short

[Ajaaz A]

star=good use of words
star=correct punctuation
wish=try to use words not numbers

[ketan c]

it was good french and very descriptive.

[Uma A]

1. Nice describing words
2. Paragraphs and...
could have been a bit longer

[Hafsa K]

1. Good punctiation
2. Good vocab
could of been longer

[Hafsa K]

1. Good paragraphs
2. Good punctuation
Could of used words instead of numbers

[nishil p]

The french was very good.
The work was in paragraphs.
Instead of numbers,he could have used words.

[Haneefah A]

good adjectives
interesting
could have made your writing longer

[meenar.s]

Star:Good use of words :)
Star:Correct punctuation :)
Wish:Instead of numbers you could have used words :(

[Neel R]

STAR(*)= correct spelling
STAR(*)= good range of vocabe
WISH= could of used words and not numbers

[Josh K]

1.It was written in good French.
2.It was paragraphed.
1 wish.Instead of numbers he could have used French words.

[Bhavik.C]

Star:Good French!
Star:Written in good paragraphs!
Wish:Could have written numbers in French words!

[Miss Wilson]

Excellent Ciaran