Moi- Uma RW

Salut! Je m’appelle Uma. J’ai onze ans et mon anniversaire c’est le seize fevrier. J’habite à Leicester. J’ai un frère et une soeur. Il s’appelle Anand et il a six ans. Elle s’appelle Devi et elle a neuf ans. J’adore mon frère parce qu’ il est petit et mignon. J’aime ma soeur mais quelquefois elle est pénible. Je n’ai pas d’animal. Je voudrais deux chiens parce qu’ ils sont mignons et sympa.

Comments

[Bijal T]

1. There is some good descriptions about her brother and sister!
2. It's good that she's put her opinion about animals!
She could have used a variety of words such as normalement.

[Amna k]

i like the way you said SALUT and
i like your font and the colour of your font because it's very clear! But i think that you should of written more!

[angelee k]

I like the beginning where she wrote salut
She has wrote alot about her pet
But she could have wrote more about her brother and sister

[Neelam v]

1. you have used intesresting words to explain your opinions.
2. it was diffrent of you to start your paragraph by saying SALUT!
i think you could have made it a bit more longer.

[Palka.C]

1)I liked the Salut bit
2)I liked the pet bit too!

But you could used more interesting words to improve.

[Hafsa K]

1. Like "Salut"
2. Good vocab
it could have been londer :D

[Haneefah A]

1. liked the SALUT! bit
2. nice and colourful
wish- could have written more

[Neel R]

STAR(*)= Eye catching
STAR(*)= colourful
WISH= Could have made it longer!

[Ciaran.k]

Star:Like the salut! bit.
Star:nice choice of coulor.
Wish:could hav written more.

[Bhavik.C]

Star:Your work stands out!
Star:Nice Vocab!
Wish:Could have written more and in paragraphs!